on the condition of being human and such other lies

i read your poem and all i thought was
          that after that line there should
be a break - a pause to make the reader
         think of the travesty of the souls

lost

i stopped myself from reading further
                           - when in time did i stop

reading for content and start the adamant
dotage of critic - and not even a good one

friend across the sea - may your friend be safe